Friday, December 6, 2013

55 Flash Fiction Friday - Day Off

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This is a 55 Fiction I wrote back in college as part of my creative writing class.

Dallas Swat’s Day Off

“What’s wrong?” She asked groggily waking from a sound sleep.
“It’s work I have to go in. Sorry.” He climbs out of bed looking at his pager.
“You know I understand. I feel bad for you it was your day off.” She sits up watching him get dressed. He kisses her. “Be safe.”

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  1. nice little vignette...it leaves enough of the facts out we can fill it in...light or dark....depending on how we want to read it...

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    1. Thanks! My professor at the time was pushing me to write a little more open ended and I started to really liked the light or dark open ended endings.

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  2. This is a great 55! Good characters and plot. Now I long to know more.

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  3. If it's a pager, it's probably important. Hard to see him go, though.

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  4. Hi Amelia. Love how you used dialogue to tell your story and the open endedness.

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  5. Welcome!!! This one is outside the norm. Congratulations. And isn't she so sweetly understanding? It isn't easy using dialogue to effect in such a short piece. And never tell all. I learned that somewhere along the line. Let your reader figure out a few things for him/herself.

    Again, nice to meet you here.

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    1. Thank you! No it's not easy, which was his point. I'm also a part of Pen 10, where we try to write stories in ten lines or less. That also is difficult.

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  6. Ah.. My husband gets calls at all hours… I am always appreciative when it doesn't ring.

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